2008年5月19日 星期一
Happy night
On Friday, I went home after five long weekdays. It was so delighted to get rid of in the train of assignments and accompanied with family dear members for the next two holidays. Usually, my father pick me up alone from Feng Yuan, but last time my mother also came with him. We went to a fancy restaurent, and orderd many cources of our favorite fresh seafood. Planning where can we go to travel on this weekend. After having a full and content meal, we went to visit my aunt and my little two year old nephew was also there. Everytime I play with him or just see his naive smile, all my tiredness and sadness were gone imediately. Old people talk how their life been through, however, we younger ones watch our common TV program , a singer show called "walk of fame." Time flies soon when you espacially have a wonderful time. About 11 o'clock, my parents and all my aunt's family members went to the night market had so much fun while playing games and eating delicious snacks. It was a great Friday night with my relatives and parents, I really like to be with them and love them so much.
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Everyone has a warm home and enjoy the happiness of a family union. I think we are so luchy that we can gain many peoples' love. So, we should study hardly and try to find more times to company with our family!
Compliments:
Your description about a Friday night is short but plentiful of joy.
Suggestions:
The whole article will be more complete if some sentence structural grammar can be corrected.
Corrections:
*The following () are my corrections.
"(A)Happy Night"
On (one) Friday, I went home after five long weekdays. It was so
(delight) to get rid of (the train)and (daily assignments) and (then)
accompanied (my) family dear members for the next two holidays. Usually, my father (picked) me up alone from Feng Yuan, but (this)
time my mother also came with him. We went to a fancy restaurent, and orderd many (dishes for) our favorite fresh seafood. (At the same time, we planned where we could go to travel on this weekend while we were having the dinner.) After having a full and content meal, we went to visit my aunt and my little (two-year-old) nephew was also there. Everytime I (played) with him or just (saw) his naive smile, all my tiredness and sadness were gone (immediately). (Older) people (talked about) how their life (had)
been through (recently;) however, we younger ones (watched) our common TV program (which was) a singer show called "walk of fame." Time (always went) soon when you espacially (had) a wonderful time. About 11 o'clock, my parents and all my aunt's family members went to the night market (and we had so much fun playing games) and eating delicious snacks. (It was a great Friday night with my relatives and parents. I really liked to be with them and also love them so much.)
Your description about your family has blessed time. I think this quality time was very treat, so you should very blessedly.
It seemd that you had a good time in your holidays.
Your article was organize.
But you can make the clear paragraph will be better.
I agree with you because I also enjoy the time with my family. It is normal but it is happy and sweet.
Sorry, I don't really undersatnd what are you trying to talk about clearly.
And some words you should choose more carefully.
Holiday doesn't mean the weekend.
Your description show that yor really had a good time on your holiday. And I think that you shold seprate your whole paragraph to three and that would be perfect.
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